tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post3821332029083573095..comments2023-10-22T23:29:48.012+13:00Comments on O Audacious Book: Tuesday Poem: YellowUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-15873594513350827482011-03-25T08:43:46.402+13:002011-03-25T08:43:46.402+13:00Pam, oh no - butterscotch! If you'd been my hu...Pam, oh no - butterscotch! If you'd been my husband you'd have insisted on a repaint. And you're right - how wonderful - the word 'yellow' is open-throated. The 'yell' and the 'ow' in there, it's not a quiet, modest word like 'lilac'. I tried to reproduce the short 'e' and 'o' and 'll' and w' sounds elsewhere in the poem, too, to echo it... I like that he's 'gleeful' when he finds his yellow...Mary McCallumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07482261103185786111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-43710477523587347802011-03-24T23:04:41.413+13:002011-03-24T23:04:41.413+13:00Mary, I love the way yellow streams through this p...Mary, I love the way yellow streams through this poem, the perfect pitch of colour found then sought then found again. I like the way it dogs you in the best possible way - I get the feeling there could be years of history in here. I like the repeating of the word itself, it's so open throated - so ... yellow! I know about the hunt for perfect platonic ideal of yellow - my partner and I had different epiphanies. He painted the room, and he loves it. It's not right! Too much butterscotch! Perhaps redemption will come as a poem.Pam Morrisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01422149903301168261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-75085712617733391792011-03-23T22:35:36.089+13:002011-03-23T22:35:36.089+13:00VS - thank you. Your reading of the poem takes my ...VS - thank you. Your reading of the poem takes my breath away. Not only did you get the 'strange sunlight' in it and the 'loaded' brush - but you amplify this and make me see it afresh. For example, I hadn't thought of the dress as the holy grail of yellow, for even in its glory it hurt the eyes, and the colour yellow became so problematic subsequently that the dress itself became part of the problem ... but yes, it is of course the holy grail and along with it youth and love. I like that. I love, too, your comments about seeking the 'by now mythical colour'... and the question: 'does it even exist?' is a very interesting question indeed.Mary McCallumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07482261103185786111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-88838370529793938372011-03-23T09:57:51.556+13:002011-03-23T09:57:51.556+13:00Mary, this is wonderful and the mood moves like a ...Mary, this is wonderful and the mood moves like a strange sunlight on the pavement under the literal feet of the poem--the glory of that unmatchable dress and the love there; then the trials to replace the color (which also includes youth, young love, a perfect day) then the sort of panic to examine your take on that by now mythical color--is it close? Can we repeat it? Can we find it? Does it even exist? The looking for is for a brush loaded with color and longing and unspoken disappointments and mistakes. Lovely, Mary. xoMelissa Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03270919534011711225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-32851502413074853842011-03-22T22:38:17.376+13:002011-03-22T22:38:17.376+13:00Kat, thank you! So glad you loved the poem and TP....Kat, thank you! So glad you loved the poem and TP. I just had a look at your blog and the photos of your friend's workspace are just lovely, as are the rest. Thank you for visiting...Mary McCallumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07482261103185786111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-49700327448405271452011-03-22T18:24:06.797+13:002011-03-22T18:24:06.797+13:00Do you know I just want to sound like a teenager a...Do you know I just want to sound like a teenager and say I love this poem. and I love yellow.Its the colour to plant to plant in your driveway to say welcome.Its expansive and its endless.I am enjoying how you melded all the emotions and tension associated with the colour into this.<br />Thanks for the tuesday poems.KAT ADL'Shttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18207087848010028220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-57800103087925952832011-03-22T12:43:56.174+13:002011-03-22T12:43:56.174+13:00Thanks Susan, Belinda and Mark. I like that 'w...Thanks Susan, Belinda and Mark. I like that 'walking sideways' - and I have read 'Yellow', Mark, in that gorgeous collection you published but had forgotten it - will read it again. It is a tricky colour -- I guess most poems would write of it as a sunny celebratory thing. For me, it's much more problematic.... as you can see...Mary McCallumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07482261103185786111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-17552217739936413742011-03-22T11:40:25.447+13:002011-03-22T11:40:25.447+13:00Hi Mary, I like this poem. Very evocative. Have yo...Hi Mary, I like this poem. Very evocative. Have you seen Alistair Campbell's love poem 'Yellow'. Very different poems of course, but worth reading also. It was in the "Love Poems" collection I published by Meg and Alistair.Mark Piriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09999627310717567736noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-61154840256990887232011-03-22T10:00:38.555+13:002011-03-22T10:00:38.555+13:00I like this enormously - I'm so glad you'v...I like this enormously - I'm so glad you've posted it.lillyannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12752638206153634574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-688274121226963086.post-44488783869226294542011-03-22T09:14:59.164+13:002011-03-22T09:14:59.164+13:00it says so much, mary, in that walking sideways, n...it says so much, mary, in that walking sideways, now you see it/now you don't way that i find so compelling.<br />bravo!<br />--susansusan t. landryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12454487318141469849noreply@blogger.com